Fri, Apr 10, 2009

Peter and I decided that it may be easier to find places of submission for this piece. Unlike the "The Witch Queen and the Steamer Trunk", I did not make as many edits to this draft because I felt a strong piece of the story was missing. After some discussion, we decided that Jean realized his decision to quit music (after his daughter is born) too quickly. I suggested that Peter lengthens the trip to the hospital, making it more of a trek in which Jean can take the time to contemplate his decision. Peter agreed with this suggestion. I believe this is Peter's stronger piece and am excited to read the next draft.